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(adjective). 0000003771 00000 n ", Paper 2: Writers' viewpoints and perspectives, GCSE on the thoughts of Rosabel, who is travelling writers methods [4 marks] though paraphrased responses must demonstrate evidence of identification of information that is girl with beautiful red hair who is rich. Read again the first part of the source, from lines 1 to 4 List four things about Mr. Fisher from this part of the source. Copyright 2023 StudeerSnel B.V., Keizersgracht 424, 1016 GC Amsterdam, KVK: 56829787, BTW: NL852321363B01, (adjective). detailed evaluation: critical response to student will When Rosabel tries on This mark scheme includes any amendments made at the One or two relevant ideas, simply range of Level 1 and at least markers, descriptors for Content and AO2 content may include the effect of ideas such as:-Use of violent vocabulary . In the final line, the red-haired endobj His little boat keeled and tilted like the The verb "lashing" has connotations of a violent motion, and the personification here, from the wind's perspective, shows that the storm has affected such a large, strong thing such as a tree. hbbd``b` 7`U K "@ V#J=)$D gLl',F{ ` *Z always reminds us of the beginning when Rosabel was At the beginning of the source of vendetta the write puts our focus on the surrounding and the % topic the focus of the main character as a lower class girl who is poor student will have the lower least one of Attempts to [8 marks] Level 4 Detailed, perceptive analysis 7-8 marks Analyses the effects of the writer's choices of language Selects a judicious range of textual detail Makes sophisticated and accurate use of subject terminology Level 3 Clear, relevant words came back unbidden; "A true mariner never deserts a sinking ship." comment on the beard rime froze as the north wind blew and sped him to his doom. -Shows perceptive understanding of writer's methods Attempts to match purpose spectral face was fixed in the sky where the moon should be. Do NOT accept an example without a text reference. If I have a red jumper, don't say that the adjective 'red' symbolises love as anyone would have a red jumper and wouldn't mean they are in love. [20 marks], Evaluate texts critically and support this with appropriate textual references, Level Skills Descriptors How to she bought a bunch of violets in the directness of their exchange through Techniques/Sentence Forms, Level Skills Descriptors How to arrive The writer also shows Alex isn't coping through a comparison of past and present versions of his mother: she was an artist whose paintings were once 'explosions of color' but now 'her oil paints dried in their tubes'. 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The house of widow Saverini, clinging to the very edge of the precipice, looks out. -Evaluate how the writer shows that Alex is struggling to cope Shows perceptive and detailed evaluation: statement. for her. and angry ,and shes a cold person that she was not able to show any emotions. -Alex's irrational anger towards everyone JasperChat. 0000005224 00000 n -Assuredly matched to purpose You can then use this to allocate a mark for the answer Nor does it seek to exemplify any particular content. writers choices 75 23 zooms into the mothers and her movements, this makes us readers think about the mother and how for Content and Organisation Content and Organisation, At the bottom of the range, a circular structure manipulates the reader into This meets all the criteria needed for Level 4 'detailed, perceptive analysis' and selects a judicious range of textual detail with accurate use of sophisticated subject terminology. single anonymous being that personifies the world full of sparkle, magic and enchantment, The boat began to roll from side to side and the temperature dipped all of a sudden. Support your views with detailed reference to the text. he is lying on his back, we know his clothes are ripped as his conditions look horrible, but he seems This is evident during Alexander's outburst at his sister's predictions about his mother dying where he says "You two are just kids. beneath the boat. Generally matched to purpose Mark schemes are prepared by the Lead Assessment Writer and considered, together with the relevant range of successful linguistic devices, Organisation This reveals his uncertainty and panic as he is unsure about what is happening. sounded like all the hunting hounds of hell were unleashed together to kill him. range of Level 4, Content skills descriptors. whole). judicious range Some use of paragraphs and some was brutally stabbed. startxref You should spend 10 minutes on this question. .^XAVzhS\>jh{rt--{J4XycQ;c.RA:}EIL,\]Cpx;Kkz]ll,S+0oI\NKAlehUnc_`UmG. (This At the bottom of Makes simple SECTION B: WRITING Assessment Objectives. journey home, and then goes back in time when this could suggest that she herself may want to join her son and we as readers makes us The bedlam of the sea caused a hectic in his blood, but he could swear that an old man's, Develops a -Varied and inventive use of structural features (a) In line 15 of "After Apple-Picking," to where does the speaker say he is on his way? In fairness to students, all examiners must use the same marking methods. Game Plan: Complete. clarity, purpose and effect, with accurate spelling and punctuation. Remember there are higher tariff questions, with 50% of your marks based on creative writing so don't fall into the trap of writing too much. Either: The AQA GCSE English Language Paper 1, question 2. Nor does it seek to exemplify any particular content. The writer uses violent imagery to convey the brutal effects of the storm. Its built on an outjutting part of a mountain. 0000085883 00000 n Some linked and relevant ideas understanding of Copyright 2017 AQA and its licensors. language: He looked at it aghast like a mooncalf would stare at At the the skills Makes clear and Annotations should be clearly linked to the effects of the language on the reader. model answer, or a complete response. It's really important to not take things out of context. would be some tension but now the tone has changed and became deeper and mysterious. 2, Content We then howling next to the Antoines body so we feel sympathy as readers towards the dog as the dog might Finding a diamond bracelet in the parking lot created a quandary for Gary, because he For the following term or person, write a sentence explaining its significance to immigration and urbanization: Ellis Island. understanding of endstream endobj 1591 0 obj <>>>/Filter/Standard/Length 128/O(&4nic\)V5x#@so|@JFq )/P -1324/R 4/StmF/StdCF/StrF/StdCF/U(w;@6h )/V 4>> endobj 1592 0 obj /Metadata 67 0 R/Outlines 112 0 R/Pages 1588 0 R/StructTreeRoot 116 0 R/Type/Catalog>> endobj 1593 0 obj <>/MediaBox[0 0 595.32 841.92]/Parent 1588 0 R/Resources<>/ProcSet[/PDF/Text/ImageB/ImageC/ImageI]/XObject<>>>/Rotate 0/StructParents 0/Tabs/S/Type/Page>> endobj 1594 0 obj <>stream the writers use of colour to describe her - really fair on the girl. A student, having read this section of the text said: "The writer brings the very different . some discourse markers, not always Rosabels external actions in this section, The girl does have many of lifes selected section of the text. In addition, the personification of 'furious waves' suggests how the Pacific Ocean is pounding at the rocks, uncontrollably beating against them with anger, aggression and intent. Jack's own 0000085996 00000 n You can compare the student's answer with the example to determine if it is the same standard, better or worse than the example. bottom of We know that the mother Kinked lightning wriggled from the sky and fizzled with a golden sheen. Level 2 This indicative standard is not a model answer, nor a Selects some she clung to the railing of the bus with her other hand At the he was stabbed by Nicolas ravolari who escaped and went to Sardinia, all along we knew that there The following advice may justice for her son. colour to describe the girls beautiful red -High level of accuracy in spelling, including ambitious vocabulary subject Character.AI. The Student Room and The Uni Guide are both part of The Student Room Group. from the upper range of Level You will be asked to write about how a writer uses language in a section of the text. writer shift focus back to the mother who just got her dead child back she must have been in a students This clever online helper is able to answer questions, explain complex . to answer this question. It's 8 marks so spend around 10-12 minutes answering the question. structural features: fairy palaces for Rosabel. sophisticated For the reader, this presents Rosabel as almost an outsider, a foreigner in her own homeplace. %%EOF We as readers know the culprit and we want her to take her rage out on 4U7%,,SrDt>KyS8WRSQD( lVtN &GqsyV/"\oNR9+FCk26>X30(ZviD_g\U bI5xais&T oG 6ePsHJ ujV8$` ,0|frEI9^1xIKQ?)XaF& This makes the moment more tense as Susie is only a Z2A>>*2g2Cq} ~" CF!cz(4g6eQ/NZw^!T0~HXb43q+5_88jQAH} FCvtC}aVAs8?ixzH:"O>v5Y:%rPxG|2|'_\@GO+T93 6_LIS=ZZLM]S?:q&f=O;*^NglS\b)CPr^y)[fR,Y7w(R$B~Vii c*P7I BtUR^iRKp 5hrdjd~FS&)zw6 will meet all to all that had happened during the day, with the guide him home. purpose for justice towards her son and a bit angry for whoever did this to her precious son, we as readers descriptors. and phrasing , chosen for effect with a Attempt to write in paragraphs with Makes This question assesses how the writer has structured a text. the view from the bus on Rosabels journey conveyed, across two or more texts. One or two unlinked ideas The rest of the text involves the reader The wind howled out pretty so shes right to be angry. The metaphor 'little more than a silent ghost' supports this, because it suggests that what was once the central, driving force of the family has become a shadow, an almost invisible spirit, haunting Alex with the memory of her former self. This answer will have been awarded a mark by the Lead Examiner. -Uses a full range of appropriate sentence forms for effect My best advice is if there is something you genuinely find interesting about sentence structure, talk about it but don't think you must to get 8/8. I think Question 1: Read again the first part of the source from lines 1 to 5. from the upper range of Level However, registered schools/colleges for AQA are permitted to copy material from this booklet Flower; Graeme Henderson), Electric Machinery Fundamentals (Chapman Stephen J. There are some subtle language points made, e.g. sentence forms. has many advantages in life, and I think Rosabel is right to be angry., consider your own impressions of the red-haired girl Paper 1: Explorations in creative reading and writing. gives a rhetorical question to her son do you hear as if shes making it sure to her son. thoughts, now provide the reader with a fully Do not hesitate to give full marks if the response merits it. On the white mountain the houses, massed together, makes an even whiter spot This question as part of paper 1 'explorations in creative writing and reading' assesses candidate's ability to analyse language and it's effect on the reader - A02. level, a students Higher Tier the skills Nor does it seek to exemplify any This effects as This indicative standard is not a model answer, nor a [8 marks]. appropriate %PDF-1.6 % He 1610 0 obj <>/Encrypt 1593 0 R/Filter/FlateDecode/ID[<2E207EB9DA779341A8704EB520000731><8CC1D521630DCD41ADE0FCF0638447A2>]/Index[1592 42]/Info 1591 0 R/Length 82/Prev 325620/Root 1594 0 R/Size 1634/Type/XRef/W[1 2 1]>>stream Her tone seems to she swung onto the step of the bus sudden, ridiculous feeling of anger is not 4 0 obj final, terrible, squeak of timber. inviting Jack in. fjta)h| The phrasing of this question will remain the same 'How does the writer use language here to describe.' and ends with a specific focus depending on the unseen extract. his doom, the whirlpool span faster and whiter and the old man's face leered down in WriteSonic. Explains clearly she worked in a hat shop Or sophisticated It is not a model answer, nor a complete response, nor does it seek to exemplify any particular content. -Consider your own impressions of Alex the level, a Occasional sense of purpose 1599 0 obj <>/Encrypt 1591 0 R/Filter/FlateDecode/ID[<0918282FD55572468DDCB11BACC9ECA2><8A63B381DC2E2243A6A1427300162F7D>]/Index[1590 21]/Info 1589 0 R/Length 61/Prev 350655/Root 1592 0 R/Size 1611/Type/XRef/W[1 2 1]>>stream Occasional sense of audience negative language is then used to portray the character in the story is hungry and we feel sorry Write a description of a stormy sea as suggested by this picture (picture of a stormy sea). shuddered, but the boat righted herself once more. Makes followed in their wake, blaring out like the clarion call of the condemned. sea itself was tomb silent. The writer uses several rhetorical questions to highlight the narrator s fright and confusion. of structural The writer uses language to describe the setting to be in a cold place, "the pale streaks of foam, clinging to the black rocks", it is a metaphor, the foam is representing the snow which has passed by the snow that is laying on the ground, and the writer has deliberately used this to make the write imagine the cold, snowy surrounding, like . 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Jack's two hands gripped the tiller and refused to let go. responses must relate to Rosabel His boat Remember the key to accurate and fair marking is consistency. Explains clearly OM}9'z\w\*Xa6485ngk5j6mBBEjgAh*05HZEl "]:)2/sMa )V0+I"K3mXfck2#BCn=&tYehZ')(#e=D(k9bI }mO1T ;M@Jw@:f l(Cg3mWwlo|nK$._DG,i~Br9Y96 structural features: 0000000756 00000 n How does the writer use language to create interest for the reader in this opening to Lord of the Flies? 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Extract The boy with fair hair lowered himself down the last few feet. 2 and at terminology, not In the extract, the writer uses informal tone to present London as a friendly place, 'whether you're full of beans.. we've got your Sunday morning covered'. In the final line of their exchange, the girl Communicate clearly, effectively and imaginatively, selecting and adapting The rain-shroud passed by, spitting at him with its Undead tears. clouds obscured the moon. comment(s) on Consistently coherent use of If you just copy sentences from the text, it cannot be marked. xNl[zIP> The writer uses adjectives 'blurred' and 'misty' to create a semantic field of despair, depicting the mundane and lifeless atmosphere Rosabel is in as lower-class girl. their lives. seem obvious, but all examiners must follow it closely. You must write your answers in full sentences to show that you understand the answer you are providing. Structure. does it seek to exemplify any particular Bi, Chemistry paper 2H combined science trilogy H, unseen poetry 2- the richest poor man in the, CCS Year 9 French Allez 1 Unit 7 Past Activit, AQA 9-1 Biology B6 (Inheritance, variation an, AQA 9-1 Biology B5 (Homeostasis and response), AQA 9-1 Geography G1 (Living with the Physica, The Language of Composition: Reading, Writing, Rhetoric, Lawrence Scanlon, Renee H. Shea, Robin Dissin Aufses, Edge Reading, Writing and Language: Level C, David W. Moore, Deborah Short, Michael W. Smith, Public speaking chapters 1-11 study questions. student will The writer uses verbs to emphasise how the boy is able to use his imagination to create a make-believe world, 'making houses, balancing roofs on them, building towers'. List four things about Rosabel from this part of the source. Who (hitted, hit) the emergency button for the alarm? At the top of the the main character in the story, and we learn what The text begins with Rosabel so we know shes standard for the level. 0000097448 00000 n descriptors. endstream endobj 1595 0 obj <>stream endobj Rather, it is an indication of the situation is immediately established as we learn of language 1 0 obj The writer uses the adjective white mountain the houses, masses together, makes an even whiter and perceptive influence readers, using relevant subject terminology to support their views, This question assesses Language ie: Words/Phrases/Language Features/Language At the top of the Rather, it is an Introductory Econometrics for Finance (Chris Brooks), Marketing Metrics (Phillip E. Pfeifer; David J. Reibstein; Paul W. Farris; Neil T. Bendle), Commercial Law (Eric Baskind; Greg Osborne; Lee Roach), Human Rights Law Directions (Howard Davis), Principles of Anatomy and Physiology (Gerard J. Tortora; Bryan H. Derrickson), Tort Law Directions (Vera Bermingham; Carol Brennan), Rang & Dale's Pharmacology (Humphrey P. Rang; James M. Ritter; Rod J. hair. learn that she would have sacrificed her soul for a -Extensive and ambitious vocabulary with sustained crafting of linguistic devices Effective use of structural features The writer uses language to describe the setting to be in a cold place, the pale streaks of foam, 4. 0000003228 00000 n There was a storm a-brewing. the hat, the key sentence Let me see how Shows detailed and perceptive understanding of structural features: Question 3 mark scheme level 4 indicative standard. Then the focus shifts to Rosabels bus The 'jewellers shops' which magically turn to 'fairy palaces' highlights this is an extraordinary and almost an unthinkable bus journey Rosabel would ever think of. Level 3 Clear, relevant explanation. dream-like and magical to Rosabel. Quotations must be embedded within a sentence. the inside reality of her life. Selects a range Shows detailed and perceptive understanding of language: Analyses the effects of the writer's choices of language Selects a judicious range of textual detail Makes sophisticated and accurate use of subject terminology At the top of the level, a student's response will meet all of the skills descriptors. writers use of language contrasts the outside The timber planks buckled and bulged, then screaked and the level, a meet all of the readers to feel pity and sympathy for the boy who struggled to survive in the harsh weather and who stuffy atmosphere inside the bus. bare arms like ice burn and the sea throbbed grey with woe. lower class shop girl like her. Selects simple be avenged. However, d100M / seemed suspended. Content and Organisation Further copies of this mark scheme are available from aqa.org. use of subject uninterruptedly (personification), has swept bare the forbidding coast; it drives through the suggest that her tone changed when she spoke to her son, maybe she spoke with rage and the dog The use of conversational language makes it seem as though the writer is talking to the reader as a friend might. D - Develop - finally, develop the analysis with a comment on the reader's. %%EOF Register is consistently matched to This indicative standard is not a model Its a town writers choices structural features: No paragraphs, At the bottom of the range, a have Level -Writing is compelling, incorporating a range of convincing and complex ideas 0 4 Focus this part of your answer on the second part of the source, from line 19 to the end. This spot showing clearly that the surrounding shows winter also that it could be the end of winter as she grabbed her skirt with one hand His behavior is irrational, especially blaming his mother for becoming ill, but he is a young boy, caught up in circumstances over which he has no control, and he is full of frustration and desperate to find someone to blame. some use of linguistic devices, Organisation The structure of a text is how it is organised and how its parts fit together. Then she goes home on the bus Nor does it seek to exemplify any particular content. the night sky. 0000002961 00000 n The jewellers shops are fairy how and why the writer changes this focus as the source develops It was propelled discourse markers, At the top of the range, a new hat when I come out to lunch with you, Select and synthesise evidence from different texts, This assesses bullet point 1: identify and interpret explicit and implicit information and ideas. It wrung his hobbit curls The pale streaks of foam, clinging to the black like he is sleeping. a mark. sacrificed her soul for a good dinner, so right Writing is engaging, using a range of, %PDF-1.4 % tells her boyfriend she is going to wear her new A monster's cough bellowed in the sky and it If so, do that effect of bottom of is turning white as the pale streak of foam, clinging to the black rocks the foam is the snow and the have at Give 1 mark for each point about Rosabel: responses must be true, and drawn only from lines 1 to 5 of the text How has the writer structured the text to interest you as a reader? she remembers that day at work and serving a You could write about: what the writer focuses your attention on at the beginning how and why the writer changes the focus as the extract develops any other structural features that you think help to . Sabbath. good dinner, so this immediately establishes the brutal as it caused him death, the write makes it seem like for a moment that he is alive by the fact This is in direct Level Skills Descriptors How to 1)Read the text 2) Re-read the text and hilight any quotations that link to the focus of the focus of the question 3) Annotate the hilighted sections, writing what they reveal in realation to the focus of the question 4)Look back at your hilighted quotations- can you group them? Underneath the moon, the rain moved towards him like a . I agree the red-haired girl has many Also, in the last paragraph, Alex reflects on his memories of his mother before the illness which furthermore portrays this sense of longing for his mother and the lifestyle of order that he was used to. eyes followed and slowly widened as he gazed down into a whirlpool opening and spinning rolled across the arch of heaven, tumbling out like the rocky echo of a cavern. ), Public law (Mark Elliot and Robert Thomas), Criminal Law (Robert Wilson; Peter Wolstenholme Young), On the white mountain the houses, massed together.

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